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I'm writting something, I'm wah-wah-writting something!


Eschew elucidation, espouse obfuscation.

Title by ZescZesc, 04 Sep 2022 19:04

Yeah, some humans are like that. I still think they are wrong, but I guess it is not a flaw in the story.

I will keep an eye out if I find anything more.


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by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 16 Jun 2022 21:27
Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat 16 Jun 2022 21:22
in discussion General / Per page discussions » Vaksik

Welcome to the sandbox. where minds roam free.


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by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 16 Jun 2022 21:22

Ok, I'll change the scapegoat wording (though maybe just by removing the for the devil part) and move him to a different base.

The bastard part was something I was unsure of myself, and even though I changed the wording for it several times, it still doesn't feel right. So I might remove this snippet as well.

As for the whole part on his abuse and backstory, I largely based this on someone I met many years ago. And while she was schizophrenic and not malformed, her family gave her similar treatment regarding religious intolerance. The sad part was that she did have family friends come over, only they didn't care as the whole community shared a similar mindset to the parents. This echo chamber also led to the parents' absolute certainty that their decisions were correct, eliminating any feelings of hypocrisy about saying stuff like bastard (not that they knew the dictionary definition of it either).

The not fighting back is a textbook case of chained elephant syndrome. However, in most cases, if they learn they are the ones in control, situations can turn hellish. And I picture Thomas to be in the process of fighting him while beth is dialing for support. Also, I never said he was locked in the same building as his parents. Think the ring and saw put together.

I hope that clears some of your confusion, and if there are any loopholes in my reasoning, let me know so I can fix them.


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by ScaledDaturaScaledDatura, 14 Jun 2022 05:15

Glad you are better.

I would change the location away from Base 8 as it (in my mind) is more of a warehouse.

Shape changing based on emotions has been done before, but I still think the variety is original. Do the transformations give extra immunity? If not why is a head shot or teargas not enough to bring Markus down?

seen as a scapegoat for the devil

This might need rephrasing to

seen as a scapegoat or a devil

If I understand the practice of scapegoating you give all your sins to it and than ether kill it or drive it of. Both do not seem to match his parents behavior of keeping him.

If he was born with the condition he would be most likely be seen as cursed or as a curse upon the family, maybe even a divine test (Hiob), but that would not lead to the physical abuse you are going for. If his parents were not isolationists and had not hidden the pregnancy, there church community would have noticed the child going missing after birth. Also the role of his midwife is unclear. I am not 100% sure how the christian community you envision runs, but usually even there pregnant woman have a professional with them for birth and if they were not especially anti technology, they would most likely have been in a hospital.
There is a way to sidestep this by changing the beginning of his condition to after the baptism, with the family faking the sudden death of there child. Not very christian of them, but what do I know about their religious practice?

The bastard's broken free

Calling her son a bastard as a christian implies she is an unfaithful spouse. In German we call that an "Eigentor" (your words reflects negatively on yourself, beyond you insulting others).
Calling the police implies that officials ware complicit in the capture and holding of a child. If the police is not part of a GOI or a strange church, calling the cops in this situation is another "Eigentor" (indirectly admitting to the police that you abuse/isolate your child).
Beth called the police and died? Did Markus in his giant form sneak back into their house after he got out?

Also, in 18 years he never got this out of control before? No one came to visit them?
No "Sunday when the family is in church" breakout attempts? Depending on when he figured out to use his emotions to change willingly his parents would most likely not keep him from digging through a wall. 10 year olds are smarter than most think and teenagers are hormonal and difficult to control even if they do not have superpowers.

It might be that others will not pick at these threads, so no worries. My way of reading things is just a bit special if you recall.


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by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 13 Jun 2022 21:34

So after about a year of dealing with my own personal problems, I've finally managed to sort myself back into a good enough place to continue writing. I haven't forgotten about my plans for Pepto and bike knight and that whole goi I was planning. But I figured I'd dip my toes back into the water with a newer item first.

If anyone is willing to give their two cents for a critique on the untabbed item, I'd be more than grateful


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by ScaledDaturaScaledDatura, 13 Jun 2022 04:57
Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat 15 Dec 2021 08:39
in discussion General / Per page discussions » the "demon"

Welcome to the Insurgency sandbox. Welcome to the "not here".


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by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 15 Dec 2021 08:39
ZescZesc 26 Oct 2021 21:00
in discussion General / Per page discussions » Eschscholtz Atoll

What are you doing here? After hacking around with multiple textshadows for a "glitchy" look, this sandbox just became my go-to "I need to try something without burning down the Kernel in the process" experimentation ground. I just never got around to replacing the original reason I created this for.


Eschew elucidation, espouse obfuscation.

by ZescZesc, 26 Oct 2021 21:00

Lights are off, text is blurry, I would say "unreadable".
Also the logo went out.


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by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 26 Oct 2021 19:56

Glad you found your way here.

I aim to give everyone a fair shake when they get into the Insurgency. It looks like you found the cold water pool before you found the well tempered showers. It's a shame when new writers hit the pool and instantly freeze to death.

Welcome to the Insurgency.

You can make an introduction here. The welcome will be warmer that the splash of cold water you got.


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Hi. by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 18 May 2021 19:33

I have a feeling like you did this as a fuck you cthuwu, but make it a bit harder in the future. I'm still interested in where this goes enough to decode it.


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by ScaledDaturaScaledDatura, 05 Apr 2021 05:42

Well, that was something.

I felt kind of disoriented in some parts, but that could just be intended. Say, why would we tell something that is not fully contained, in advance, that it needs to break out to preserve its own existence? Why would we than let it near a base-commander?

Not sure if having someone in high positions be exempt from brain scans is good practice. I figure the more power one has the more often his/her head needs to be checked for possible defects (especially in our line of work). Even if we did not know that an anomaly that can cause madness has screwed with his head, such a scan would have been in order. Strange behavior, even if it is trauma would have lead to an immediate discharge and several weeks of psychotherapy. His bullets would have been found in several corpses all over the facility, making it even more likely that something might be wrong with his loyalties.

Some strange elements, otherwise good. I enjoyed reading it.


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by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 18 Oct 2020 02:07
ScaledDaturaScaledDatura 23 Sep 2020 14:27
in discussion General / Per page discussions » Dropdown 06 7tz

Honestly, I had thought you did. And sorry for the late response, I was taking a break from writing.
But after reading what you wrote I think there isn't a more perfect ending. If you wanna go ahead and publish it I'm fully behind you.


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by ScaledDaturaScaledDatura, 23 Sep 2020 14:27

You thought I had forgotten this project, didn't you?

I think I have successfully found an end. If you have nothing more to add, I will finalize this version and publish it.


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by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 15 Sep 2020 03:06

CC0 is always ok. Attribution is only used to check that it is indeed CC0.
With CC 3.0 by-sa you need to name the source and author (if the source is outside the CI ecosystem).
And CC 4.0 by-sa can be used if you put the whole thing under 4.0, but people operating on CC 3.0 by-sa can no longer use the article until they to switch to 4.0.
There is the option to dual license the piece with the 4.0 Picture and the text under 4.0 and just the text under 3.0 thus preventing the "others cant use it" problem.

I hereby license the article and the picture under CC 4.0 BY-SA.
Author of the picture is [Name of Author of the Picture].
Picture taken from [link to source].

I hereby license the text of this article without the picture under CC 3.0 BY-SA.

~ Not officially formalised

I would just like to keep everything nice and legal, now that I am on admin staff. *honk, honk*


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Re: License by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 23 Jul 2020 21:16

I've never really paid much attention to image licenses. It wasn't very severally enforced back in the day, so I didn't think it mattered since we don't make a profit from them.

Come to think of it, my previous Items will probably need to be stripped of their images as well.

Okay so CC0 and CC3 are what's accepted, right?

Re: License by QuispyQueemsQuispyQueems, 23 Jul 2020 20:50

2 of 3 licenses incompatible.

4.0 and 2.0 in the mix.

*honk*


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Re: License by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 23 Jul 2020 15:24

the headgear wasn't going to be used, it was reference silly goose

Re: License by QuispyQueemsQuispyQueems, 23 Jul 2020 04:48

The book is a "CC BY-NC 2.0" and therefore incompatible with CC 3.0 BY-SA. That image with the headgear is from a famous movie and therefor probably not compatible as well.


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License by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 22 Jul 2020 19:40

You must have misunderstood.

I am not going for canonicity, but for character consistency. Tell me why a man that fears for his life to the point of checking, stealing and fortify a corps would ever consider his death an option and I would go with you. That would make for interesting character development.

This story builds all involved characters up. By the point the grandmother gets into the house we know the characters. Wouldn't you agree?

This comes with specific expectations. The twist you have written is actually quite brilliant if you or me can execute on the things I proposed above. The victory of the fear agent and Winzlows demise would make for a story with the moral of "Stick to your own guns and don't turn your back on anyone you relay on."

Winzlow would have lost a game he thought he could win up to the second he lost. Feribald would think he was helping while making things worse, as prophesied by Winzlow in the very beginning. He is now in the situation Winzlow prophesied as well. Quot: "That was the difference between doctors and field agents. The doctors usually only have to see the beasts once they are in a cage."

Tragic, but not uncompelling.

One would think that the doctor cant come out kicking of this, but should Willy actually be incapable of killing outside of shock or pain, than the death of Winzlow and his own stubbornness would guarantee his survival in this situation.


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by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 20 Jun 2020 20:13
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