First off, congrats on being back in the sandbox.
That tale you and Cad are writing right now confused me a little bit.
Did we send multiple agents including a helicopter and the manifestation of a natural disaster to kill one old Foundation member? (This could have been a one man chlorine gas mission.)
(To be honest, when I read the history tag and the story for the first time I thought we had murdered the entire church for no reason other than chaos.)
This also dose not align with the usage paragraph of the Ward. Assassination is not mentioned in there.
Cad might want to add that.
I am also not sure about the meaning of the cursive text.
Also you have a gab of 15 minutes in there, (the "15 minutes, 30 minutes" thing in the laps at the end, before the two knocks) which are unaccounted for.
It looks like ether a half-sentence is missing or someone changed his mind mid sentence.
If I sound to concentrated on details, that is because I am invested. My way of critiquing a piece has been meet with some "distaste" in the past. If I should refrain from following and commenting on this project please let me know.
Fighting Monsters and Language since 2016.